First Place
cockroach…once more i beg forgiveness
Philip Whitley
We hate killing bugs of any kind, so just on that level alone it resonates with us. Taking it a step further, we also see this as metaphor for domestic violence. The perpetrator is the cockroach and the other person is apologizing for a mistake that is either real or just perceived by the other person, hoping it will stop them from whatever they’re about to do, which feels inevitable because it’s in their nature. We like how this senryu can be flipped around so that it’s not only the cockroach that could be stepped on, but a person too. For this reason, it was our top choice.
Second Place
and again
the white horse wins –
merry-go-round
Joanne van Helvoort
This senryu, though seems simple, is loaded. The visual of merry-go-round fills the reader with a child-like joy. The first two lines show us that in their innocence, the children are racing each other on their horses but only a particular horse wins. Is winning of a particular horse even possible in the merry-go-round? This is where this cleverly crafted senryu takes us to a different path. Line 2 with “the white horse wins” makes us realize that this poem can actually be about the white privilege or the rich privilege. We all know how it works and how some people in power rig the whole system. It’s a vicious circle – common people work hard and strive for success, but it’s only the people in power who control the reins and reap the benefits
Third Place
first bite
your move now
Adam
Aka Moone
We love the humor in this one! The allusion to Adam and Eve and then a dare on top of it makes of think of the childhood game “truth or dare.” Using the Garden of Eden as a background, perfectly illustrates how fun it can be – do you tell the truth or take the dare? Was it in fact a dare all those years ago? It’s a fun thought, making this playful senryu one of our favorites.
Honorable Mentions
(in no particular order)
old flames
at the class reunion
not one match
Ron Russell
them
not me
the obituaries
Fred Andrle
a cheerio
in the pill box
fool me once
Ron Scully
eye of the storm
not even the wind
wants me
Stefanie Bucifal
phone call
the length of
a bottle of wine
David Grayson
middle school
even our breast sizes
have letter grades
Antoinette Cheung
a constellation
on her breast . . .
freckle envy
Julie Bloss Kelsey
my neighbors’ noises
all night long –
way to go crickets
Cristina Angelescu
nesting dolls…
how history
repeats itself
Laurie Greer
chrysanthemums trying on my wife’s kimono
Jacob Blumner
tent poles
testing the strength
of our marriage
Rich Schilling
childless
cracks forming
in the heirlooms
Carly Siegel Thorp
cash flow
the hole in my pocket
bigger than I thought
Richard Grahn
national debt!
and you’re worried
about my credit cards?
Richard Grahn
deepest breath ever leaving the psych wing
Geoff Pope
carrying the coffin –
the undertaker says
i’m a natural
Stephen Toft
sand shifting pronouns
Jacquie Pearce
first cut—
the watermelon seller bites
into his profit
Kala Ramesh
hermit crab
where to begin
downsizing
June Rose Dowis
hand-crocheted afghan. . .
too late to tell her
I don’t like maroon
Billie Dee
Smirnoff vodka
all my demons
in high spirits
Cezar-Florin Ciobica
Judges – Vandana Parashar and Susan Burch
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